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The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The table depicts the number of male and female employees and industrial units in two different nations between 1851 and 1901. The maximum number of
male’s
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male
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 workers
were
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 employed in 1851
approximately
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 more than 2 lakhs and it had fallen each year and reached up to 31,000
at the end
 of the period.
Likewise
, the female employees were almost half less than the male count in 1851 and decline every ten years and attained 30,000 in 1901. In 1851, there were 225 factories occupied in both national and
then
 it marginally
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 by two counts in within 10 years, after that it escalated substantially to reach a peak of 721 in 1881. Significantly, it was tapering off to almost
by
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121 counts within 20 years.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the number of male workers was higher than that of female workers throughout the given period.
Although
 the
factories
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factory's
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 growth was improving
in
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every year, the employment count for both genders
was
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seemed to be declined in every given period.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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