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Band 7

Mrs Barret, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barret. In your letter Suggest hou could help her in her home. Say why you would like to do this Explain when you will and will not be available.

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Dear Mrs Barret I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
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 letter to say that I saw your commercial about asking for help and I am ready to be at your service. I have been always interested in assisting people voluntarily. Actually,I realise that you are a native English woman and I am sure that you may face many problems in terms of conveying your opinion or building communication.Do not worry any more. Since I am here to help you; as I know
English
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the English

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 language very well and I can help you to find a carpenter to repair your furniture. Apart from that, I can teach you our local language. At least, some common sentences and statements. It may be useful. As I mentioned,I have been always passionate about helping people and I have taken part in several charities and volunteer organisations. It makes me feel satisfaction and confidence.
Moreover
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, these kinds of activities can help to build a powerful personality. I go to work every other day from morning until afternoon.
This
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 summer, I going to work remotely for about 5 hours a day; because of energy issues.
Therefore
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, I can help you every day. At the weekend, I am free and you can count on me. I looking forward to your answer if you
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 or not. Sincerely M

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coherence cohesion
Consider using more transition words to enhance the logical flow between paragraphs. For instance, instead of 'Actually, I realise,' you could say, 'Additionally, I realise.'
coherence cohesion
Ensure all paragraphs maintain a single, focused idea for better clarity. Some sentences within the paragraphs slightly stray from the main point.
task achievement
Although your tone is generally suitable for the task, incorporating a slightly more formal tone would be beneficial. For example, instead of 'I looking forward to your answer if you agreed or not,' you could say, 'I am looking forward to your response regarding whether you agree.'
task achievement
Your completion of the task is commendable, as you addressed all the necessary points: how you can help, why you want to help, and your availability.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing provide a respectful and polite tone, which is appropriate for an IELTS letter task.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliable
  • punctual
  • household chores
  • errands
  • flexible schedule
  • assist
  • experience
  • skills
  • motivation
  • availability
  • enthusiastic
  • dedicated
  • part-time
  • summer job
  • responsibilities
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