You eat in your college cafeteria everyday lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, • explain what you like about the cafeteria • say what is wrong with it • suggest how it could be improved

Dear Sir, I am writing

this

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letter in order to express my concern regarding an urgent amelioration in our

college

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cafe.

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, I really would like to request you to kindly publish an article in our

college

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magazine in your following publication. I must say that I extremely adore

this

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place. I often go to

cafeteria

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the cafeteria

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during

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my lunch break with my friends, and I personally love all the cuisines, which it provides. In fact, I have been visiting

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cafe since I joined

this

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college

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. All the chefs, who make all the dishes, are

well- mannered

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well-mannered

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, and they timely serve us food. It is a fully- hygienic place with

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an extra-ordinary

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extra-ordinary

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extraordinary

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interior.

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I prefer to dine out at our

college

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eatery, its prices are tremendously exorbitant. Some students, including me, are unable to afford

sometimes

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it sometimes

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. I know that everybody would

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agree with me.

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hangout place offers some of its food items at a very higher rate as compared to other eating places.

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, it needs to scale down its prices, so that every student could afford

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accordingly

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it accordingly

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. Would you mind publishing

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serious matter? I would appreciate

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it if

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you could do

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on the behalf of all the students. If you do

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, the management would think about

to reduce

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reducing

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its charges. Hoping to

hearing

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hear

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from you soon. Yours faithfully, Jasmeet Kaur

jannatbhatia7

May 9, 2020

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