Some people believe that it is the resposibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Diacuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is widely argued that the self loyalty for health issues is to be
manged
be successful; achieve a goal
managed
by each human.
while
Suggestion
While
, some opponents opined that it is to be appropriate if the
government
Use synonyms
determines to set special standard limits for the consumption of low-calorie eatables, I believe that the individuals ought to accomplish a healthy life by themselves.
Firstly
Linking Words
, each person is to take
true step
Suggestion
a true step
the true step
towards the matter based food.
Secondly
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,
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,
were
In or at or to what place
where
the people abide by the policies implemented by
government
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put on the deleterious foods, which contain much of salt, sugar and fat, humans would have
more healthy life
Suggestion
a more healthy life
.
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However it
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However, it
is inappropriate that every
individuals
Suggestion
individual
act with the contingency on habits based food despite any rules of authority, unless humans include health improving diet, except calorific eatables, on the daily consumption, they will accomplish more productivity in their health.
For example
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, In Berlin vast majority
,
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,
73%, of pupils give all
on
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of
the junk or pre-
preparrd
made ready or fit or suitable beforehand
prepared
prepare
foods from the initial stages of childhood. From the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
perspective, those who rely on the
government
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to have a significant role in the reduction of obesity through proclaiming laws.As it is
forementioned
being the one previously mentioned or spoken of
aforementioned
, human beings are seriously overweight that leads to a serious illnesses as heart disease or diabetes.
Moreover
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, the prohibition of unhealthy foods at schools
are
Suggestion
is
to be set and arrange more sports based exercise on the school schedule of the pupils.
For example
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, In Indonesia
government
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promoted daily healthy foods, demonstrating
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
nutritional contents on the package, and exercises. In conclusion, despite the laws of authority against unhealthy foods
,
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,
it is better for inhabitants ought to be self reliant for their own well being.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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