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The chart below shows the percentage of river water in UK rivers that is classified as having good chemical quality between 1990 and 2002

The chart below shows the percentage of river water in UK rivers that is classified as having good chemical quality between 1990 and 2002
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The given chart illustrates the changes in the proportion of
river
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water
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 in high
quality
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 in four different UK countries.
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, the percentage of good
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river
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water
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 in Wales and
Scotland
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 showed a relatively stable trend,
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 the opposite was true for the figures for Northern Ireland and England, which showed some fluctuations. From 1990 to 1998, Wales and
Scotland
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 had the best
river
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water
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quality
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, which stood at exactly 95% and around 97% respectively. At
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 point, the figures for
water
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quality
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 in Wales dropped by roughly 5% to finish in
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 place,
while
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 the percentage of that in
Scotland
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 showed a steady increase up to 98% by 2002.
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, England had the worst
river
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water
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quality
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, which was just over 80% in 1990. Its figure fluctuated slightly until 1998, after which it rose to exactly 90% in 2000 and 2002.
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, the figure for Northern Ireland experienced the most significant alterations
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 but generally increased by 5% by 2002,
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and ended
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 up being equal to the figure for
Scotland
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words river, water, quality, scotland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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