More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by modern life style which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicines should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree?

Even though modern
medicine
has increased the life expectancy in general, the overall quality of life has taken a plunge due to health problems caused by the modern
lifestyle
. While some recommend a complete go back to traditional
medicine
, may
others including
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others, including
me recommend a combination of traditional and modern medicines to adequately address the situation because traditional medicines were designed at a time that did not take the modern
lifestyle
into account. As technology advanced and demand for goods increased, machines started performing many of the common tasks that humans used to perform because machines are more efficient in performing mundane tasks.
As a result
, the daily physical activity of humans has significantly decreased;
for example
, motor cars have eliminated the need to walk or cycle.
Furthermore
, as
population
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the population
increased the demand for food and supplies has increased with it. To meet that new demand, companies are producing genetically modified crops that yield a higher
output but
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output, but
can cause diseases
such
as cancer.
Although
traditional medicines are very effective in treating both common and complex health conditions, they are not designed to manage issues caused by the lack of physical activity or the consumption of unhealthy foods. Modern
medicine
has been making
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has made
tremendous progress in managing
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
problems
such
as obesity and cancer.
However
, there are a lot of known and unknown side effects to them because they have not been in the market for long. Traditional medicines
on the other
hand are
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hand, are
devoid of
such
side effects and can treat a lot of issues that people face today.
In addition
, since modern
medicine
has assumed prominence today, traditional
medicine
is ignored to a great extent and does not receive enough funding.
Therefore
, traditional
medicine
is not catching up
in
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on
with
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
of the areas where modern
medicine
is doing wonders. In conclusion, modern
lifestyle
has created medical problems that were absent in the past when humans consumed more natural produce and exercised more.
As a result
, traditional
medicine
that was created without taking the modern
lifestyle
into account cannot solve all the medical problems of the day even though it offers effective cures to many illnesses. Modern
medicine
,
on the other hand
, received significant research attention in the
last
century and has made strides in curing many diseases caused by
lifestyle
.
Therefore
, I recommend a combination of both traditional and modern medicines to create a harmonious balance.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lifestyle diseases
  • sedentary habits
  • stress-related disorders
  • holistic practices
  • comprehensive approach
  • preventive measures
  • traditional dietary practices
  • evidence-based practice
  • integration
  • efficacy
  • natural herbs
  • wellness
  • affordable alternative
  • public education
  • stress management techniques
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