The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.

The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.
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The chart presented the number of journeys
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car
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the car
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into the
city
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centre by
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and
non-
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residents
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between 1996 to 2005.
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,
this
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graph shows
residents
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and
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residents
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decreased
go
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going
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into the
city
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by
car
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year to year.
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, Ten thousand
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by
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journey into the
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in 1996,
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and over
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4000
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went into the
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by
car
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in 2004. Between 1999 to 2002, more than 8,000
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residents
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stably travelled into the
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by
car
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,
whereas
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this
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number got the lowest point is 3000 to 4000
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. We can see
residents
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actively travelled into the
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by
car
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from 1996 to 1999,
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from 2000
that’s
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number sharply declined.The data clearly show both
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and
non-
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residents
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went into the
city
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approximately 4000
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apply
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per day for three years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, city, residents, non-residents with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • residents
  • non-residents
  • urban planning
  • traffic management
  • regulate
  • measures
  • impact
  • increase
  • decrease
  • compare
  • explore
  • evaluate
  • potential
  • journey
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