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In some countries, people who commit less serious crimes are made to undertake community service* instead of a prison sentence. Some people believe that all people who have committed a crime should be sent to prison. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many individuals think that the best way to punish those who get engaged in any kind of
crime
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 should be to
sent
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send
 them to
jail
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. I totally disagree and the following essay will explain why. Unless murder is concerned, people who commit more minor crimes should be given another chance to correct their behaviour. Isolating a person in the
jail
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 seems to solve the
problem but
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problem, but
 to some there are better solutions to make criminals think critically about their actions,
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 as assigning them to complete community hours. Another point to be considered before sending a person to prison,
specificially
in distinction from others
specifically
 teenagers, is to evaluate the level of
crime
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. There are a considerable number of delinquents that get engaged in anti-social behaviour;
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 fighting and shoplifting amongst youngsters is something common to be seen.
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, bringing these people to prison most likely would not benefit to improve their
behaviour but
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behaviour, but
 inclusion of youth
counselors
someone who gives advice about problems
counsellors
 would be considered a great deal of help. Admittedly, a point that could be made in support of the opinion that criminals should be sent to prison is that these people while suffering the sentence in
jail
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 and being deprived
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of
 many privileges would better think to commit a
crime
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 for a
second
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 time;
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, the life experiences
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have shown
 that a person causes
crime
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 again and ends up in
jail
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 more than once. To conclude, it is better for people who commit crimes
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 as theft or similar to be addressed to work in the community during their free time. By doing so the individuals work would serve a good purpose and the government would have to spend less on jails.
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