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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only government and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often thought that individualized efforts and actions has little or no role to play in the improvement of the environmental conditions. Others,
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, are of the opinion that creating a greener environment solely depends on the joint efforts made by governmental bodies and big industries. I totally agree
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with
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 opinion as
government
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 posses the power to enact and enforce rules promoting safer
ecosphere
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 and the
finance
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 to tackle nationwide pollution and other environmental problems. On the one hand, improving the space we live in is majorly the role of the
government
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 and big factories.
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 is because he
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makes
 the law and have a way of enforcing it on the citizens.
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, the
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 can place a strict control on improper waste disposal as well as recycling both for the citizens and big business organizations. Defaulters can be made to pay a fine in which will invariably reduce the overall wastes generated in a day.
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 to
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, making the
environment eco
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environment, eco
-friendly requires a huge
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finance of
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finance, of
 which only the governmental authorities and notable companies can provide.
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 can be illustrated in a study on advance waste management conducted among the dwellers of a popular country in Europe. It was found that
finance
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 was the biggest limitation in achieving an environment devoid of pollution. In conclusion, I totally agree that improving the
ecosphere
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 largely depends on the
government
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 and big industry establishments.
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 is because the
finance
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 and the authority needed to achieve
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 revolves around these two entities.
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