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Universities should accept equal numbers of female and male students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
In the past decades, women
have
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had
 much less roles in different parts of
society especially
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society, especially
 in
education
 section, even for
further
 university degrees there were not space for feminine. Some people would argue that the college admission rate for
both
 girls and boys should be same in each field of study.
This
 essay agrees with the statement because
both
sex
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sexes
 should have
same opportunity
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the same opportunity
 for success and a balanced competition would be developed among
both
gender
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genders
.
First
 of all, academic institutions should provide an equal chance for females and males to pursue their
education
 in each major they like. If there were not biased thoughts toward the capabilities of each gender, an equivalent condition would provide to uncover the talents of students.
Therefore
, they could blossom in their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 subject. A study conducted by Cambridge university shows that those societies, which created
balanced
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a balanced education occasion
education
 occasion for women and men,
had have
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had had
great breakthrough
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a great breakthrough
 in science.
In addition
, universities by adopting the same figures of different genders in any major, a constructive competitive atmosphere among
both
sex
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sexes
 would be created. Pupils always have
competition sense
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a competition sense
 toward his/her opposite gender.
Therefore
, it could lead them to perform better in their exams and become more diligent.
For instance
, in famous universities like Harvard, there is much
contestation
 between girls and boys, which make
this
 academic institution
such
 prestigious. In conclusion, I believe colleges by adopting identical rate
between
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among
 female and male could realize equal
education
 chance, and providing an effective
contestation
law determining the fundamental political principles of a government
constitution
consultation
 among student with different sex.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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