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Some say that people living in high-rise apartments are lonely and unhappy, while others say that it’s advantageous to stay in high-rise apartments. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Nowadays, with increasing in urbanization in cities, many people like to live in skyscraper apartments. By increasing
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 trend, some people believe that people often feel lonely. While, others argue that high rise apartments
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 have benefits. In
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 essay, I shall discuss both the views and give my opinion. On the one hand, people who are in the favour of in skyscraper building living life feel people are not satisfied and can not able to socialize. They
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 argue that in
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 an apartment neighbours are often changing and one cannot feel a sense of belongings towards their neighbour.
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 an apartment does not have a backyard or basement and they are smaller compared to house or town.
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, those who supporting living in a tall building may have some benefits.
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 of all,
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 type of apartments is ideal for nuclear families and single. Because the lease or rent is cheap compare to house.
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 a marvellous view of cities or sea from the window and balcony.
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, one can assess amenities like clubs, gyms and 24 hours security guard protection.
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, a recent survey shows that 70% population of metro cities who live in
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 apartments are singles, students and nuclear families and they really enjoy their life living in
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 an apartment.
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, with increasing population in metro cities, in the future more and more people will start living in
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 a building because of shortages of land. In conclusion, I do admit that the Flats are offering less space and not friendly neighbours, but in my opinion with the rising of urbanization our future mostly depends on living in apartments.

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