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The responsibilities for the environment rest with (belong to) not only the government but also with individuals. What’s your opinion?

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The
environment
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 plays a critical role in human life, but some decades have seen the global warming because of the polluted
environment
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. I strongly agree with the idea that both the
government
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 and individuals have to respond to the
environment
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. Looking at the individuals’ argument, they say that they pay taxes so the
government
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 should use the budget to find the way protecting the
environment
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.
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, I do not think
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 opinion is valid because they should be responsible for the disposal of their waste.
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, in Vietnam people throw rubbish everywhere,
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 animals
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 as dogs and birds might eat
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 garbage includes plastics or small pieces of glass which may damage their stomach and die.
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, people should be concerned the kind of waste and classifying them in daily life. The
government
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 might have many ways to protect the
environment
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.
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, they should impose a strict law that bans the unprocessed wastewater from factories directly into the water sources. Formosa in Vietnam is a noticeable example and their toxic emission killed all flora and fauna in a large of the sea. The
government
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 should punish with a large amount of money or withdraw the business license if companies violate
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 law.
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 could lead less air and water pollution.
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, the
government
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 should plant more trees, open more parks
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 as in cities and around industrial areas, which may reduce the heat from the Sun and concrete buildings. In conclusion, I believe that protecting the
environment
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 is responsible of both the
government
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 and individuals. I think that people should aware the global warming affected by human behaviour.

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