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University should enrol equal numbers of male and female students in all subjects. Do you agree or disagree?

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The educational institution is a huge institution where one can acquire a heap knowledge of the courses selected as per one's choice, be it a male or a female. In my opinion, whether
academy
Suggestion
the academy
 should enrol equal number of male and female in all subjects, I would rather concur both.
Firstly
, the reason why I agree is because, every
program
that is
 designed for a student is not
gender
 specific. As in, there is no foolproof guarantee that, only one
gender
 can excel in that specific
program
.
For example
, a
program
 related to home science that has a curriculum for cooking and homemaking. It is a not a
program
that is
 restricted to females alone, if men can get an opportunity to learn and if they are keen on learning,
then
 the
academy
 should give them a chance as well.
Likewise
, for a woman who is interested in pursuing mechanical engineering. She might have her own ambitions in leveraging her career in that space.
Secondly
,
on the contrary
, the reason why I disagree is because, it shouldn't be a mandatory norm that every student of both the
gender
 types have filled the seats to meet the
program
 requirement.
For example
: if there is a subject under a
program
, where the number of male candidates exceed the female candidates,
then
 the
academy
 should not enforce the female students to pursue that
program
, if the numbers don't meet.
Lastly
, in conclusion, education is a choice and the courses chosen by each individual should be purely under their discretion. It's not about male or female, it's purely based on an individual. And due to
this
 option, every
gender
 should get equal opportunity in pursuing a
program
 that they dreamt of. An
academy
 should not be a hindrance for not allowing an individual in succeeding the same.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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