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It will be more effect full for improve the deftly on our own road is to have a stricter punishment for driver who driving carelessly . Do you agree or disagree?

#effect #road #punishment #driver
It is often argued that it will be
more effect
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more effective
 full for
improve
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improving
 the safety on our own road is to have a stricter
punishment
 for those
driver
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drivers
 who drive carelessly. I completely agree with
this
 opinion and think that if it is followed it will definitely work
.
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.
Fast
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Fastest
 of all
,
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,
 believe that a hard and following rules only can change our own road safety. Even if someone
crous
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crosses
cross
 the rules and
then
 for that traffic police or other security team give them that
punishment
on the other hand
 Other people will see it and become alert and they will drive safely.
For example
 If someone
break
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breaks
 the traffic light rules are driving with
overspeed
 and for the police immediately get him and
also
 gave the
punishment
 by following
rules it means
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rules, it means
 not only caught him but
also
 need to give management every time
Secondly when
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Secondly, when
 the rules and regulation followed strictly for
everyone
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everyone, then
then
 it
also
 make a fear and responsibility on
people
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peoples
 mind. Like when someone see that rules are following hardly for everyone
then
 he or she will not drive recklessly to conclude I strongly believe And agree on the heart and the streak
punishment
 can make our own yourself

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