It will be more effect full for improve the deftly on our own road is to have a stricter punishment for driver who driving carelessly . Do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that it will be
more effect
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more effective
full for
improve
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improving
the safety on our own road is to have a stricter
punishment
for those
driver
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drivers
who drive carelessly. I completely agree with
this
opinion and think that if it is followed it will definitely work
.
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Fastest
of all
,
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,
believe that a hard and following rules only can change our own road safety. Even if someone
crous
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crosses
cross
the rules and
then
for that traffic police or other security team give them that
punishment
on the other hand
Other people will see it and become alert and they will drive safely.
For example
If someone
break
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breaks
the traffic light rules are driving with
overspeed
and for the police immediately get him and
also
gave the
punishment
by following
rules it means
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rules, it means
not only caught him but
also
need to give management every time
Secondly when
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Secondly, when
the rules and regulation followed strictly for
everyone
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everyone, then
then
it
also
make a fear and responsibility on
people
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peoples
mind. Like when someone see that rules are following hardly for everyone
then
he or she will not drive recklessly to conclude I strongly believe And agree on the heart and the streak
punishment
can make our own yourself

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