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The given line graph show that three sector education health care and pensions on the basic of share in budget of countries in past and future years

The provided triple line graph represents a comparison among three
sector
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sectors
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education
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 health care and pensions on the basis of
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share
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the share
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 in
budget
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the budget
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 of a nation.the survey shows information about
past
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the past
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 and
also
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 makes
prediction
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predictions
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 about
future
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the future
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 (2051). The data has been calibrated in terms of
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
total
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the total
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 amount.
Overall
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, till now, the
share
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 of
allthe
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all the
 three
filds
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fields
files
 was hardly changed but it
likely
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is likely
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 that medical care will follow a downward trend
while
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pension
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 will an upward trend
one
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apply
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though
education
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 is not likely to
so
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have so
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 much variation. Now, turning towards the details of
past
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the past
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 (from 2001 to 2019)
education
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 topped the chart with around 15% of
total
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the total
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 amount
while
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pension
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 lagged behind with only 6% of
total
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the total
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 each
decades
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decade
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.the percentage allocated for medical moved slightly upward from 11% to 19% in that period.
However
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, currently, though no change is recorded in
case
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the case
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 of
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pension
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pensions
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stil
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still
 at six
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percent
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per cent
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 of
total
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the total
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 yet the
share
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 of
education
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 has
farbn
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carbon
 down to thirteen
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percent
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per cent
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.
While
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 as per future speculation, the
sahre
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share
 of
budget
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the budget
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 to be allocated for
education
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 will be constant
of
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at
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 14% of
total
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the total
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 till 2051. But a sharp increment will be seen from six
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percent
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per cent
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 to eighteen
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percent
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per cent
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 in
case
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the case
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 of
pension
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 and it will grab the top
share
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.
In contrast
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,a sudden fall is being
predicated
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predicted
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as for
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apply
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as medical care is considered.it will
decilne
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decline
 by 8% over the time period of three decades in future. So a significant variation has been recorded.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, share, pension, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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