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The diagram illustrates the basic principles of a hydraulic dam.The process includes a large dam,powerhouse and long distance power lines.

The diagram illustrates the basic principles of a hydraulic dam.The process includes a large dam,powerhouse and long distance power lines.
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, electricity production from the hydroelectric dam is a complex process and it needs various equipment as well. At first,the water is collected in the reservoir behind the dam,
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 it is forced through an intake.the intake is connected to along narrow channel called
penstock
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a penstock
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,
and
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apply
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 which is extended to a machine called
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turbine
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a turbine
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.The
turbine
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 has many leaves .The pressure of the water increases when it is forced through the penstock ,
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 it rotates the leaves of the
turbine
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.the
turbine
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 is connected to a huge generator ,which is located in the powerhouse. The generator
produce
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 electricity when the
turbine
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 rotates .After
that
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 the generated power passes through different areas with the help of
long distance
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 power lines.The production of hydroelectricity is a natural process and it does not harm the environment .In the final stage ,the remaining water flows out through a
second
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 channel and into a river.
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, these all are the different stages involved in the principles of
hydroelectric
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a hydroelectric
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 dam.

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