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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Health of citizens is an important factor in the progress and future development of the
country
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. In regard to
this
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, I would say that
government
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 should provide some of the free health services to people as the high cost treatment is
unaffordable
impossible to avoid or evade
unavoidable
 by huge sections of the society. It caters to many reasons which are as follows. It is the prime duty of the
government
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 to provide
healthcare
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health care
 to the citizens of their
country
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. But due advancement in technology and medicine the cost of treatment has
also
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 reached a level where poor section, unemployed or older people are not able to get proper
healthcare
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health care
. Private hospitals are totally out of reach for these people while
government
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 hospital does not have faculties and facilities to provide care. The
government
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 needs to cater the situation in the best of its ability like organizing medical camps in the rural areas. The people below poverty line must be given free medical checkup and medicines, free consultation from doctors. One of the effort made by
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government
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the government
 was ‘Mohalla Clinic’ which is a type of mobile clinic built in many of the areas where people were given best of their
treatment but
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treatment, but
such
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 type of clinics must be available in the reach of the people or in the areas far from the hospitals. The medical test must be available at a very subsidized rate. To conclude, even though advanced equipments or medication could not be provided due to low
fund but
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fund, but
government
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 needs to provide other free health services to
people
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the people
 of the
country
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 as they are the future resources of our
country
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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