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Some people think that government funding should not be used for supporting Art and Culture,while others think that supporting cultural activities may be beneficial for the population and the culture.Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #government #art #culture #activities #population
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People have different idea about investing money for
profession
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the profession
 and cultural activities,
although
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 some people consider the act of putting funds by government to back arts and fashion is
waste
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a waste
 of money. I believe that cultural affairs should be looked after. For, it could have
advantage
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advantages
 for either the society or civilization.
First
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 of all,
antiont
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 fashion and craft are noticed as a
treasures
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treasure
 of a country.
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for
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For
 instance
turkey
large gallinaceous bird with fan-shaped tail; widely domesticated for food
Turkey
 is a country with an old history and a lot of tourists. As The multitude of
toriests
someone who travels for pleasure
tourists
terrorists
are
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is
 more interested to
trave
change location; move, travel, or proceed, also metaphorically
travel
 to the historical countries,
This
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 feature will help the society
inhance
increase
enhance
 and increase
financial income
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the financial income
 of people.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 ignoring it will deteriorate the economy situation.
Secondly
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, craft and fashion
is
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are
 the most
influensive
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influencing
method
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methods
in
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of
 stimulating the
sence
a general conscious awareness
sense
science
senses
 of
asthetic
relating to or dealing with the subject of aesthetics
aesthetic
authentic
 in people
,
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,
this
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 future prevent
person
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people
a person
the person
persons
of
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from
 getting mental disorder.
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such
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Such
 as
depressetion
a decrease in price or value
depreciation
depression
, suicide
,
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,
 and...
Although
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, for some developing country with an increase rate
in
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of
 poverty and a poor educational
facility it
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facility, it
 will be
exterimly
to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect
extremely
 uphill to make financial invest on ability and craft, but
in
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on
 the other hand it could go through
this
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 difficulty by
inhancing
increase
enhancing
 its profession crafts.
Such
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 movement will help both people and government. To sum up, putting attention and money on culture and art not only benefit the economic issue but
also
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 provide people with more happiness and energy.
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