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Some people think that economic progress is the only way to measure a country’s success, while others think that there are other factors which can be used to measure a country’s success. What are these factors? And among them, which one is more important than others?

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There is an ongoing debate amongst people about how a
nation
Suggestion
nation's
 development can be measured. In my opinion, I believe that apart from economic
progress
, other factors should
also
 be considered. Many
countries mainly
Accept comma addition
countries, mainly
 focus on improving their economies, as it is considered as the backbone of a
nation
Suggestion
nation's
 success. The economy is measured in terms of Gross Domestic Product.
In other words
, the amount of product a
country
 produce or manufacture for consumption. Many countries try to maximize their GDP because it will improve their economies.
For instance
, as per the recent data collected by The World Economic forum, The United State is the largest producer of domestic product and
hence
 has the highest GDP.
On the other hand
, there are other factors, which plays an important role in a
nation
Suggestion
nation's
 success.
First
 and the foremost, the
happiness
 of the citizens living in a
country
. A
country
 is formed by the people living in it and if they are not content with their life,
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
 that
country
 may never
progress
 irrespective of the domestic product it produces. The effects
of
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on
 a citizens
happiness
on
Suggestion
of
in
 a
country
 is now recognised by many
nation
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nations
 and
hence
 vital steps have been taken to ensure their
happiness
.
For example
, Dubai every year
conduct
Suggestion
conducts
 a survey known as The Happy Index in which the people gives an overall rating, if they are happy with the current government.
Secondly
, the health and Education sector may
also
 be considered for a
country
progress
.
This
 means that the local people may have an access to the state of the art infrastructure in the hospital and
university
Suggestion
the university
. A
country
 may
progress
 if the local people are educated and are taken care
off
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 when they are ill. In conclusion,
although
from
Suggestion
for
 many
decades economic
Accept comma addition
decades, economic
progress
 is measured for a
nation
 to succeed, the people’s health and
happiness
 are equally important.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
  • holistic approach
  • subjective well-being
  • quality of life
  • human development index (HDI)
  • green economy
  • technological prowess
  • social cohesion
  • equality and equity
  • cultural vitality
  • political transparency
  • judicial efficacy
  • civil liberties
  • progress indicators
  • societal prosperity
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