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Many people keep dogs and cats as companions. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of pet ownership for the animals involved and the community as a whole

There are several reasons why having a cat is better than having a dog as a pet.
To begin
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 with, it is not difficult to have a cat, because it is easy to look after it. It has a little impact on the owner’s lifestyle. It is quite beneficial, especially for people who have a hectic life and need to deal with many other things.
Moreover
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, a cat can stay alone at home for a long time.
However
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, a dog is cannot stay alone long, and demands concern from its owner all the time.
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, it is not easy to look after a pup.
Secondly
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, it is more economical to have a kitty. It can be fed ordinary food
such
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 as vegetable, fruit, pasta, cheese, egg, and so on.
Furthermore
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, a kitty rarely gets sick and needs to be vaccinated no more than once a year. So, an animal’s food and health care don’t cost very much.
On the other hand
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, a dog demands a variety of food, especially protein-weighed like meat, chicken, fish, and so on.
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, a pup's health care needs to be done often.
Therefore
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, it is expensive to have
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 animal for people, especially people whose economic situation isn’t good. In conclusion, cats are more suitable than dogs as a pet due to their easy care and small-scale needs.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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