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In some countries , the government promote public transportation and discourage the private vehicles what are the advantage and disadvantages?

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Nowadays
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 due to pollution the authority decides to restrict the private cars and launch the public transport
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 There
is
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are
 numerous merits as well as demerits of
this
 trend
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 will explain it in the following paragraph
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To begin
 with the advantage of public buses and trains
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First
 of all
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 it is
more cheaper
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cheaper
 than personal vehicles and it carries numbers of people at one time due to
this
 anyone can easily afford it
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Therefore
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 it is available in reasonable price
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 Apart from that public transportation
also
 help to cut down the traffic jams
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As a
result it
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result, it
 improves the situation of roads
ti
in the direction of
to
 be precise public taxies can reduce the air pollution
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 Turning to the drawbacks of public vehicles it provides inconvenience to get to far places by separation of work and destinations and in buses there is
lot
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a lot
lots
 of jostles it
also
 leads them to argue with others for seats
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As a result
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 people prefer to visit by their own cars
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Furthermore
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 it is time consuming and cannot maintain the consistency of
secudule
plan for an activity or event
schedule
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Hence
 people become late for their work just
bacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
 of their unreliability
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Morever
in addition
Moreover
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 travelling
by
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with
 them is risky not giving the
gurantee
give surety or assume responsibility
guarantee
guarantees
 of safety
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 To
conculde
decide by reasoning; draw or come to a conclusion
conclude
coincide
concede
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refers to the speaker or writer
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 believe that the benefits of public transport far outweigh the disadvantages because it is
dimishes
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dismissing
dismiss
 the ration of traffic congestion
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