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What do you think is the greatest contribution of your country in the field of science and technology? Describe it and explain why it is of great importance. Give details and examples in your explanation.

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Pioneer scientists all support the idea that some of the most considerable areas that can bring enormous benefits to
economy
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the economy
 of
nation
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the nation
nations
a nation
, development of vital sectors, education area etc.
are
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Are
 the fields of science and technology.
Accordingly
, I
completely
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completed
 in the same opinion with
this
 statement of scientists as well.
However
, unfortunately, according to my observations and evidences that we notice regarding the attempts of our current government governing approximately for the past 20 years, certain investment
on
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in
 technological improvements and scientific researchers are not visibly noteworthy. In the following paragraphs, I will tend to demonstrate the way our authorities refer to and benefit from the significance of the contribution to these subjects.
To begin
 with, since our administrators of
countries politicians
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the country's politicians
country's politicians
 should not be aware of the huge efficiency of utilization
from
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of
 science and technological process,
therefore
 concrete tendency in order to provide
sufficient foundation
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a sufficient foundation
 for these
establishment
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establishments
can not
can not
cannot
 be observed. The principal demonstration why leaders of Turkish policy do not attach significance to these areas is that because of the minority of institution associated with scientific innovations. It is
undeniable fact
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an undeniable fact
 that
country
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the country
 has become incredibly dependent on inventions and developments from foreign countries to consume. There is not
such
 an evidence or aim proving that governments willing to endeavour to participate in
competition
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the competition
 with developed countries.
On the other hand
, even though
giant number
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the giant number
a giant number
 of populations
has
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have
 the same perspectives that
countries
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country's
 development level depends on the successful achievement occurred in
scientific field
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the scientific field
a scientific field
scientific fields
, protests or encouragement of members of society is not well inadequate for
emergence
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the emergence
 of any attempt.
For instance
, one of the basic proofs of value for investment on technological area is demonstrated by USA.
For instance
, thanks to their trial to send
first
 human being to moon, limitless efforts were provided by the all staffs of NASA with the endorsement of
government
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the government
.
Consequently
, in the wake of landing on
moon
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the moon
, America is officially determined as a winner of the cold
war which
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war, which
 has lasted almost 4 years between SSSR AND USA. To sum up,
although
 the priceless effect of success
on
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in
 scientific studies and technological inventions
have been accepted
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has been accepted
 by
majority
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the majority
a majority
 of nations as a crucial requirement, our government
can not
can not
cannot
 realize the actual fact that can grow Turkish status from all
direction
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directions
.
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