Some people think a crime should always have a fixed punishment, like for murder, whereas other think you should take the circumtances of the crime into account. What is your view point?

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Punishment
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is
such
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an important rule that
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
should have in their country in order to maintain and control
society
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. Many people believe that fixed
punishment
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has to be realised to each
crime
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, but some people refuse
this
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statement because of some reasons. They come up with reason that every criminal has different motives while they commit the same offence, even it is
murder
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. I
strorngly
with strength or in a strong manner
strongly
agree that
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punishment
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the punishment
given by the judge must consider
circumtances
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the circumstances
circumstances
of each
crime
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. Philosophically, the above statement that
murder
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should officially deserve fixed
punishment
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is logically extremely useful for
society
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and will lead to
society
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safer, because it will make people think twice to commit
murder
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. It
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also make
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also makes
judges easier to prove criminals guilty and deliver the verdict to them. The judges just need
sufficent
of a quantity that can fulfill a need or requirement but without being abundant
sufficient
evidences to sentence murderers and they will directly deserve fixed
punishment
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without looking
forwad
at or to or toward the front
forward
any reason behind it.
On the other hand
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, the reality
show
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shows
many different facts. Take shoplifting
for example
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. Not every shoplifters have the same reason why they commit. Some commit
bacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
they need money and some goods to keep their family alive. Some commit it
bacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
of other reasons,
such
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as they have problem with
shop owner
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the shop owner
a shop owner
shop owners
.
This
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issue is as the same as other crimes, even
murder
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.
Forthermore
in addition
Furthermore
, It is possible to say that the same
crime
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exactly has many various motives. It happens often in our
society
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today. Giving a
punishment
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to
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for
different reasons is unfair. To sum up,
although
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fixed
punishment
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leads our
society
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safer and safer, there is still
possibility
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a possibility
the possibility
that criminals must be
realive
(of pain or sorrow) made easier to bear
relieved
relived
realize
their situation based on the
circumtances
your overall circumstances or condition in life (including everything that happens to you)
circumstances
circumstance
. In my opinion, I
conlude
decide by reasoning; draw or come to a conclusion
conclude
concluded
that every judge has to consider a
crime
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situation.
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