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More and more young people use the Internet to socialize. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

#people #internet #development
Dear James and Carol,
First
 of all I would like to tell you that I had a wonderful time with you on the holiday, and I believe all is well at your end, and here at my end, it's been great. Moving on, I would like to thank you a lot for sending me the photographs of the vacation that we spend together and
also
 for the great plan that you guys made for
this
 vacation. I am sorry that I am writing
this
 a bit late, reason being I was caught up in many things since I was returning from a vacation so lots of things was pending there which took all my time and
consequently
this
 letter got a bit late.
Finally I
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Finally, I
 would like you to come over at my place and stay here and enjoy at my place now, it's my time to return the favour, looking forward to your revert and hope to see you soon here with me. Lots of Love. Jaspreet.

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