Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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These days, emphasis has been made on altering the justice system, especially with regard to the manner in which punishments are meted out to offenders. While some people support that specific disciplinary actions be served to individual offences, others believe that the events surrounding the atrocity and reasons for it should be considered before punishment.

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essay will examine both views, but I support the latter side of the argument. On the one hand, the main advantage of punishing criminals, according to each misdemeanour committed is that it serves as a deterrent to potential offenders.

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, over the past few decades in Nigeria, the crime rate has drastically dipped by 40% on account of an amendment of the constitution relating to criminal and financial crimes, which postulates that each violation must receive a specific sentence or punishment.

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rigid practice of dishing out justice has

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led to a rise in the number of wrongly convicted people, and

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has no tolerance for pardoning criminals.

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, cross-examination of circumstances surrounding the infraction and the reasons for committing it is in accordance to civil rights, which states that every person has the right to speak and to be heard.

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practice would ensure that no individual is wrongfully accused or convicted of a wrongdoing and ultimately will enforce justice.

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, it enables people who have committed non-heinous crimes to receive pardon. In conclusion,

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legalising a constant method of disciplining criminals may be beneficial, it

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has its disadvantages and

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, more attention should be paid to the motive behind the misconduct. I hope our leaders will reform its judiciary, in order to enable transparency in

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arm of government.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

285 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

fixed punishments
consistency
predictability
deter crime
potential offenders
streamline
judicial process
bias
corruption
complexity
human behavior
circumstances
justice system
intent
remorse
socio-economic background
rehabilitate offenders
recidivism rates
flexible punishment systems
inconsistencies
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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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