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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent decades, global warming has been receiving a great deal of media attention around the world
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 its substantial
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 on human life.
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 the idea of coexistence between
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 and humans appears reasonable,
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 cannot be viewed as the ultimate approach for humankind to combat
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. There are a number of reasons why
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coexistence can do more harm than good.
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 is largely shaped by human-caused geoengineering rather than nature itself.
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, in order to produce the energy that drives the world’s economy, most nations rely on
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fuels like coal, oil and gas, which directly correlates with the intensification of global warming.
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even if citizens agree to keep the environment the way it is, corporations, especially in the manufacturing and mining industries, would not as that would affect their profits.
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, it can be implied that if corporations were not held accountable for their contribution to global warming as in the case of coexistence, the issue of
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 would inevitably be exacerbated. It is more economically sound to actively prevent
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 than to ignore it. In fact, the costs, either financial or non-financial, of dealing with future consequences of
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 can be overwhelming.
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, the increase in intensity and frequency of storms can cause massive
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 and deaths in many coastal areas, which would take decades to recover.
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, rising temperatures have
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 contributed to the extinction of species worldwide. It should be noted that the extinction is irreversible and comes at
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 cost to the ecosystem and apparently humans living within it. In conclusion, actively combating global warming must be regarded as
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 priority given the high urgency. Governments and corporations worldwide should take steps to ensure that
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 remains at bay.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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