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Some people say that living in a high-rise apartment block is a lonely experience because there is no community spirit. Others say that people who live in high-rise apartments have a much better sense of community than those who live in houses. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, a significant number of people are moving from many different parts of Argentina to start a new project. These people have to think about what type of housing they are going to choose to live in. It is thought that living in a tower block could be
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 a solitary experience due to the lack of sense of
community
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.
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, another
group
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 of people believes that living in high-rise buildings has a better team
spirit
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 than living in a house. On the one hand, there is a
group
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 of people that thinks that living in a high-rise apartment block could be a lonely experience. To start with, it might feel a bit desolated when you move into a building full of unknown people that they seem to be in their own world.
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, it can be difficult to construct a collective
spirit
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 when that involves joining unlike people.
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, living in a house might be heartwarming since you live in a kind of little
community
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 which is your family.
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, another
group
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 of people thinks that living in a raised apartment building has a much better
community
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 feeling than living in a house. It is well known that when you live in a block of flats you already belong to a
group
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 of people that lives at the same address. The creation of a team
spirit
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 is natural and unforced.
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, it is common to have arranged monthly meetings to talk about important issues which really improves the sense of being part of a
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. In conclusion, everything will depend on the people who live in each type of housing. In both cases there is an already created
spirit
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. I strongly believe that the main goal is to deepen and strengthen the bones inside the
community
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community spirit
  • sense of community
  • lonely experience
  • interaction
  • connection
  • residents
  • common areas
  • shared spaces
  • privacy
  • anonymity
  • isolation
  • noise pollution
  • crowdedness
  • proximity
  • amenities
  • activities
  • events
  • management
  • supportive
  • inclusive
  • security
  • belonging
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