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getting promotion is one of the biggest drives for people to apply themselves and work hard in the modern workplace. Why do you think people are so driven to get promotion? What other factors influence people to work hard?

#promotion #drives #people #work #workplace #factors #influence
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Promotion
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 is an effective factor at workplaces. Many individuals Perform well every day to get promoted in their
company
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 by giving excellent performance, building a reputation and proving professional skills at the workplace. Most of the people considered that consider that, achieving
promotion
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 is a one of reason that influence workers to
work
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 hard in the modern era.
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, there are many other factors
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 as
job
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 security and success in their field that persuade employees to do better at
work
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. In
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 essay, I will shed some light on why people
work
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 hard in their professions what factors are involved in it. It is true that
promotion
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 boost the salary of the employee. People go to
work
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 to make a good living and get basic needs by earning money. Every worker wants to get an increment in their stipend. To get
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, people
work
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 hard to build their reputation in their
company
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 by showing up every day on time and complete all the Duties of their
job
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 with more enthusiasm.
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 all leads them to get promoted in their field which ensures their high salary mainstream. To illustrate, a recent study by Toronto University showed that around 60 percent of employees in an Amazon
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company gives
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company, gives
 their best performance to get
promotion
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 in
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company
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a company
the company
 which doubles their salary. On there other hand, there many other factors that make employees
work
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 hard in their profession, one of them is
job
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 security. Nowadays, there is a lot of competition in almost every profession. Shortage of labour has greatly decreased with an increase in population and immigrant. People
work
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 hard to stay in
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company
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the company
a company
 in order to have a source of income.
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 to
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, they have fear in mind that somebody can easily replace them by giving excellent performance in a competitive society.
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, a recent research showed Chandigarh University states that people in India word hard with more efforts due to high competency in profession cause by the availability of huge
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 seekers as
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 nation have a population of 1.3 billion people. In conclusion,
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 people do their best to get success in their jobs to achieve
promotion
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 to have quality of wages, but they
also
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work
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 hard to ensure their
job
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 security.
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