Many young people are leaving their homes in rural areas to study or work in cities. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

Nowadays young people are willing to move to cities due to the availability of better job facilities and universities. While some people argue that the disadvantages of
this
trend surpass the merits. I believe that
this
development is beneficial in many ways. It is observed that there are two main reasons which urge youngs to leave their
towns
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town
.
Firstly
, most universities and colleges are located in cities, students who desire to pursue higher
education
have to migrate to the cities. In
this
case parents want their young ones to study standardized intensive
education
, so they send their children to the developed areas for study purposes, is the leading factor.
Secondly
, big cities provide more employment opportunities as there are multinational companies, who want to hire young talents
,
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,
as compared to towns, where there are not sufficient job opportunities available for youth.
Therefore in
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Therefore, in
terms of
job market
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the job market
, it is reasonable to migrate cities in order to be employed. There is no doubt that
this
phenomenon has negative
aspects both
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aspects, both
students and city dwellers due to overpopulation.The evident is that, food resources get scarce and land
availability decrease
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availability, decrease
as a result
of
influx
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the influx
of youngs to cities.
Likewise traffic
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Likewise, traffic
congestion and pollution
occurance
an event that happens
occurrence
occurrences
are the big problem behind
this
trend. Regarding the advantages, the major benefit gained could be the growth in the number of university graduates, which in turn contribute to
improveing
getting higher or more vigorous
improving
the whole society's
education
level. In conclusion, majority youngs in villages tend to move to cities for reasons related to their
education
and career.
Although
this
trend has particular drawbacks, we cannot deny that it is
beneficial both the
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beneficial to both the
youth and the society itself at the same time

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Urbanization
  • Educational institutions
  • Job prospects
  • Wages
  • Economic growth
  • Cultural exchange
  • Overpopulation
  • Cost of living
  • Rural depopulation
  • Social isolation
  • Traditional values
  • Personal growth
  • Recreational activities
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