The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The line graph illustrates the total tally of enquiries that have

done

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by the tourist information office

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method of inviting in person and by letter or email or telephone in a particular city from January to June

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in 2011. During January, the highest number of enquiries had been done by telephone and

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it started falling and rising till march, after that it remained relatively stable for

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one

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month,

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it has shown

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improvement from after April to June. The enquiries in person were the least in January approximately 400, and

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it started steadily rising to almost

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the triple

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at the end

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of the period. The decent

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was recorded by letter or email,

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, it started with an acceptable

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and

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it was marginally falling till March and dramatically fell from approximately 700 to 400 between March to April and it showed similar results after April.

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although

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initially

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enquiring in person

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seemed to be having the lowest

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but

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eventually, it outnumbered

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others, which was as opposed to the enquiry by telephone

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Vocabulary: Replace the words count with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

186 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

number of inquiries
Tourist Information Office
six-month period
increased steadily
reached a peak
decreased slightly
increased dramatically
experienced a gradual decline
general trend
highest number
lowest number
significant increase
tourism interest

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