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8. The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or any other academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#qualities #skills #person #today’s #world #university #institution
It is generally believed that, in every society training cen
ters ar
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
e responsible for high quality stu
dents de
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student
students'
velopment services to improve graduates’ critical skills for becoming effective and productive specialists. Whereas, with poorly outdated curriculum
this
 purpose nev
er ascertain. I
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never ascertains
 strongly agree with the lacks of education systems to equip students for lan
ding decent
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a landing decent job
landing decent jobs
the landing decent job
job
 that will be discussed in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, it is obvious that universities play a vital role as leaders in all sectors of education like, teaching, learning and so on. These academic cen
ters ar
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
e
also
 considered as key institutions to teach professional qualifications and acquire knowledge which guarantee future prosperity. As regards, a majority of majors foc
uses on
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focus
 theoretical and useless credits which never come in handy in rea
l world.
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the real world
For instance
, architecture studies are totally practical and classes cover topics
such
 as architectural design, history, project and site planning.
Therefore
, a combination of these skills causes all graduates know all the ins and outs that enrich their experience and possess more chances of finding competent
job
.
Secondly
, lack of adoptable education infrastructure is another significant part of curbing growth. In fact, preparing students to enter
job
market ne
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the job market
eds beneficial strategies which one is updating study programs. As an illustration, engaging students in research and internship experiences as an effective approach lead to expanding their learning capacity and performance.  Students should be trained in the modern tec
hnology en
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technological
vironment which is appropriate to their educational levels and achievement of suc
cessful career. S
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a successful career
successful careers
olely because most of emp
loyers ga
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the employers
insay alumnus’ employment.
Consequently
, obtaining hig
her degree sh
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a higher degree
ould boost students’ abilities and competencies to have recruitment requirements and opens up plenty of
job
 offers. We must always bear in mind that one of the main reasons for above mentioned problems is wrong thoughts of authorities about universities. By changing their attitude and adopting objective decision students be able to move up car
eer ladder.
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the career ladder
a career ladder
career ladders

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • practical skills
  • emotional intelligence
  • self-awareness
  • empathy
  • interpersonal skills
  • networking
  • creativity
  • adaptability
  • real-world experiences
  • internships
  • mentorships
  • hands-on projects
  • foundational knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • academic learning
  • traditional curricula
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