Improvement in health, education and trade are essential fir the development of the poor nation's. However the government of richer nation's should help the poor nation's in such areas. Discuss.

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Health, education and trade are some important factors for the development of any
nation
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. If any country has achieved these main 3 factor's so the state would be considered as a developed province. There are many countries who are
lack
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lacking
in these factors and they aren't grown.
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However if
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However, if
the government of
rich province
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the rich province
helps the under developed kingdom they shall grow. The
first
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arguement
a fact or assertion offered as evidence that something is true
argument
is that the wealthier
nation
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's should a keen
intrest
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interest
interested
in helping and improving the developing
nation
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's. There are many developing countries in African continent who really need's help for growing. There are several advantages by providing aid to these nations.
Firstly
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,
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,
the global poverty rate will decrease and it will help in the increase of income in that particular
soverign
(of political bodies) not controlled by outside forces
sovereign
state. With the improvement in health facilities the report of good health's will automatically increase and the ratio of low health will decrease. Though there are many developed countries who are providing help to the developing one. But still there are many least developed nations who are under the debt and it case the Richer kingdom's should come forward and help them. By all these
aid
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aids
the trade will
also
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increase and by
this
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the developing one's can
also
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take part in
trading
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the trading
of goods and by exporting goods to the other
nation
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will
also
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help in the Gross.Domestic.
Production rate
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The production rate
of the country and it will help to boost the country's economy and above all, there are no demerits by providing aid to the needy one. In the conclusion, each and every developed
nation
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should come forward and help economically developing
nation
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's. So that we can make our
planet
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planet's
poverty free and we can boost the literacy rate to 100%. So that everyone can have a good lifestyle.
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