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Many countries face the problem of low voter turnout in their democratic elections. What are the problems associated with this and what can be done to remedy it?

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 out the importance of the ballot in a democratic country. Nowadays, many countries are facing the issue of
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 number of
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 in their respective provinces. In
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find out some possible remedies
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 with, anyone who has the right to poll is a vote.
Voters
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 the most important role in making sure that, the government
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 their desires and
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according to
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 the guidelines of the Constitution. But, nowadays, many people fail to appreciate or acknowledge their role in shaping the government.
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, the outcomes of
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 can impact the voter’s personal freedoms, taxes, and other aspects of daily life that they take for granted.
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young people are more often transient and perhaps, they often feel less invested in local
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.
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, the voting percentage in Bengaluru has been the lowest in the state (less than 50 per cent) for the past 35 years, as there is apathy to polling because urban
voters
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 are cynical about the politics without understanding. To continue with, there are many reasons that could be blamed for low voter turnouts. Possible remedies include,
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, the campaigns may have failed to engage with
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. So the campaigns must
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be appealing and promising.
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, laws should be passed for mandatory voting. Punishments should be given in the form of fines and equivalent for registered
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, who break the law by not taking part in the democratic process More than 20 countries observe some form of compulsory voting in national
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.
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, Australia, Brazil, Luxembourg and Peru.
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,
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 should have to be
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 place on public holidays which can guarantee the participation of citizens to an extent, without having to worry about arriving late or leaving early from work.
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,
voters
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 play a central role in shaping the government and their very futures. Because of the
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 impact that an election can have, people have the duty to cast their ballot if they want a say in how their futures play out. Awareness should be created for the
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 and thereby increase
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voter turnout.

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Provide a clearer argument or thesis statement in the introduction to guide the reader on what to expect in the essay.
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Enhance the logical flow between paragraphs for better coherence, particularly when transitioning between points.
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Include more specific examples or statistics to support the arguments more substantially.
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The essay effectively identifies key issues related to low voter turnout and suggests practical remedies.
engagement
The use of a relevant quote at the beginning captures attention and sets the tone well.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • undermines the legitimacy
  • efficacy
  • voter apathy
  • disengagement
  • polarization
  • populist movements
  • embolden
  • dedicated supporters
  • skewing
  • fostering division
  • comprehensive campaigns
  • counteract
  • accessible voting methods
  • logistical challenges
  • civic engagement
  • civic duties
  • compulsory voting
  • penalties
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