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Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion?

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Gender equality is the key to success in an economy of any country. Most of the people get aware nowadays about their rights in the community. Equality is one of the fundamental right of the individual in terms of gender, education and work. It is true that in today's world men and women get similar status. In spite of
this
 paradigm shift of mentality, still there are some areas where it lacks. In my point of view, there are many factors which contribute towards the inequality among men and women.
Furthermore
, I am elaborating my point below. Education is the
first
 and the foremost element of
this
 approach. There is no doubt in
this
 fact that women are succeeding day by day in each and every field. But there are still some areas where women are deprived of education, especially in rural areas due to absence of modern technology. Due to
this
, she is not aware about their rights of equality.
For instance
, my cousin lives in hometown, downtown hill, a suburb of Dublin city. She wants to do business administration after her 12th but there are colleges available in the city only. She cannot commute so far as parents not allowed her to go there. Now the future ends up with a no solution.
Moreover
, dominating man's nature is another reason which stops women to enter outside heaven. But as in some society, women are always called as a symbol of the Goddess which gives courage to her family members and lift them up with motivation which is a very true statement. One of my aunts is a great example for the company. She gained good education and currently serving the country as a police constable and become the bread winner of her family
also
. Taking everything into consideration, there is no denying that women and men both are on same panel today.
However
, there are some challenges still available which become hurdles in their path of success. But if she is able to spark a light in others, can
also
 work well as men's just because of their inner courage and rest of the support of society.
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