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Foreign visitors should pay more than the local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people think that tourists from overseas should be charged more than local residents to
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 monuments and important sites. I disagree entirely with the view. The individuals who are in favour of higher prices for overseas tourists would be that the cultural and historical places get subsidiary from the state government by the tax system. The tax is taken from the local residents f
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 is an only shortsighted view. If we talk about the economy,
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 foreign travellers contribute it by spending money on goods, accommodation, travel, souvenir and food. The government and inhabitants of every
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 should be happy to subsidize important tourist regions and encourage people from the rest of the world to
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 them. If Governments raise the tickets to
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 places for tourists,
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 they might not come to
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 our
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 to spend holidays and if they come to
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 and see the different prices for t
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tickets, then
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 they will feel discrimination and will tell to many people when they will go back to their
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. It will affect our
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's privilege. To take an example of Canada, the ticket prices to
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 the suspension bridge, are the same for everyone regardless of nationality.
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 helps to promote the nation’s cultural heritage. If overseas tourists stopped coming due to higher prices,
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 there would be a risk of insufficient funding for the maintenance of these important buildings. To conclude, I believe that people should and efforts to attract tourists towards these places. It would be wrong to charge more money to foreign tourists than provincial residents.

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