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In many countries, young people decide to leave their parents home once they finish school. They start living on their own or sharing home with friends. Do you think this is a positive or negative development.

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It is true that most of the youngsters love to live independently from their parents. Is
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 a good idea for their well being and development? I believe there are more cons to it than pros. Let us evaluate both positives and negatives of their decisions and actions.
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, let us look at the benefits and positive developments of young people living separately from their parents. Youngsters when they start to earn a livelihood for themselves and start living on their own, have to complete a lot of routine chores and have to take responsibility of a lot of tasks related to a household, which could have been taken care off earlier by their parents.
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 gives them the opportunity to become more financially smarter as they have to manage the expenses of a household and become more conscious of their spendings and savings.
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, if we look at the downsides of youngsters moving away from their family to live alone, there could be instances of them getting into wrong company and acquire illegal habits of getting into drug abuse.
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 is particularly dangerous for their development and as there is no adult to monitor their activities and guide them, these situations can ruin their lives. Even habits like smoking, which youngsters acquire easily, can
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 be a bane and detrimental to their health in the long run. In conclusion, when youngsters live independently from their parent, they tend to learn essential life skills which
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 them for adulthood, but there is always a risk of them falling for the wrong influence and getting into life-ruining habits.

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