Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but others think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on TV and the internet. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Some people are willing to get more
experience
and learn about
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
countries, that in
past
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the past
it was a common idea that
this
information is only obtained by
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
.
but
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But
in today's
modern life
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modern life, this
this
can be done by using
internet
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the internet
or watching TV too. In my opinion, I suspect that visiting other places can be
second
to none way
for
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of
getting knowledge from other
foriegn
of concern to or concerning the affairs of other nations (other than your own)
foreign
countries and I prefer it more than gain them via
internet
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the internet
or TV because it is a real
experience
. In
this
essay we will
discusse
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
both aspects. Indeed
,
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,
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
beyond the
boundries
the line or plane indicating the limit or extent of something
boundaries
of one's country have a numerous benefits and nothing can
compaired
examine and note the similarities or differences of
compare
with it. The initial point would be that as it is a real
experience
you can get new feelings and impressions which you would never get from technologies. On top of that, you can provide a good
undrestanding
the cognitive condition of someone who understands
understanding
of
thier
of them or themselves
their
culture
,
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,
you can taste their traditional food and so on.
Moreover you
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Moreover, you
can communicate
eith
expresses the means used
with
new people and learn new thing that may help you in terms of study. Language or any other things. In considering
other viewpoint
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the other viewpoint
, that
this
experience
can get from TV or
internet
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the internet
, the point can be mentioned
,
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,
that
nowedays by
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nowadays, by
nowadays by
developing technology at a rapid race there are lots of websites, TV_Shows
,
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,
channels and many other things that they
can made
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can make
all of that things possible and accessible for us
also
they can be a powerful learning tools ant be out of the
wourld
everything that exists anywhere
world
ward
. You can sit at home and just by one click, all of the world would be
availble
obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service
available
for you and it is a really first_rate. By the way of conclusion, actually by seeing the power
of technology
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technology, it
technology itself
technology itself itself
it us hard to say th
at travel
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
ing is the cream of the crop way to learn about other countries, but I believe that physical
ly travel
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
ing would be more exciting and can have a more thrill
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