Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but others think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on TV and the internet. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some people are willing to get more

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and learn about different countries, that in the past it was a common idea that

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information is only obtained by travelling, but in today's modern life,

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can be done by using the internet or watching TV too. In my opinion, I suspect that visiting other places can be

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to none way of getting knowledge from other foreign countries and I prefer it more than gain them via the internet or TV because it is a real

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essay we will discuss both aspects. Indeed

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travelling beyond the boundaries of one's country have a numerous benefits and nothing can compare with it. The initial point would be that as it is a real

experience

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you can get new feelings and impressions which you would never get from technologies. On top of that, you can provide a good understanding of their culture

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you can taste their traditional food and so on.

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can communicate with new people and learn new thing that may help you in terms of study, Language or any other things. In considering the other viewpoint, that

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experience

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can get from TV or the internet, the point can be mentioned, that nowadays, by developing technology at a rapid race there are lots of websites, TV_Shows, channels and many other things that they can make all of that things possible and accessible for us

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they can be a powerful learning tool and be out of the world. You can sit at home and just by one click, all of the world would be available for you and it is a really first_rate. By the way of conclusion, actually by seeing the power of the technology, it is hard to say that travelling is the cream of the crop way to learn about other countries, but I believe that physically travelling would be more exciting and can have a more thrill

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but others think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on TV and the internet. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Fully explain your ideas

Young people are often influenced in their behaviours and situations by others in the same age. This is called "peer pressure". Do the disadvantages of peer pressure outweigh the advantages?

In some places old age is valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Some people think that children should be taught how to cook and grow food at school. Do you agree or disagree?

SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT VIOLENCE ON TELEVISION AND IN COMPUTER GAMES HAS A DAMAGING EFFECT ON THE SOCIETY. OTHERS DENY THAT THESE FACTORS HAVE ANY SIGNIFICANT INFLUENCE ON PEOPLE’S BEHAVIOUR. WHAT IS YOUR OPINION ?

It is commonly said that today's children are facing huge challenges. This essay indent to discuss the causes of these pressures and give some suggestions to solve them.