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Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but others think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on TV and the internet. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #travel #countries #information #tv #internet
Some people are willing to get more
experience
 and learn about different countries, that in the past it was a common idea that
this
 information is only obtained by travelling, but in today's modern life,
this
 can be done by using the internet or watching TV too. In my opinion, I suspect that visiting other places can be
second
 to none way of getting knowledge from other foreign countries and I prefer it more than gain them via the internet or TV because it is a real
experience
. In
this
 essay we will discuss both aspects. Indeed
,
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,
 travelling beyond the boundaries of one's country have a numerous benefits and nothing can compare with it. The initial point would be that as it is a real
experience
 you can get new feelings and impressions which you would never get from technologies. On top of that, you can provide a good understanding of their culture
,
Accept space
,
 you can taste their traditional food and so on.
Moreover you
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Moreover, you
 can communicate with new people and learn new thing that may help you in terms of study, Language or any other things. In considering the other viewpoint, that
this
experience
 can get from TV or the internet, the point can be mentioned, that nowadays, by developing technology at a rapid race there are lots of websites, TV_Shows, channels and many other things that they can make all of that things possible and accessible for us
also
 they can be a powerful learning tool and be out of the world. You can sit at home and just by one click, all of the world would be available for you and it is a really first_rate. By the way of conclusion, actually by seeing the power of the technology, it is hard to say that travelling is the cream of the crop way to learn about other countries, but I believe that physically travelling would be more exciting and can have a more thrill
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  • cultural nuances
  • language acquisition
  • problem-solving
  • adaptability
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