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The number of older people is increasing. Some people think that this will cause problems in their countries; others believe this group is important to society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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In most of the countries old age people number is more. In most of the developed countries the health care sector is more advanced, so drastically the
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 expectancy ration is increasing. By analysing
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 matter, I here by discussing both the views. The world is changing too fast and new technologies developing dramatically. As in the
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 case wee needs older people to support us with their
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 experiences to cover up our ups and downs. For improving the technologies we need fresh ideas as well as experienced hands support.
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, if we take all the politicians in all
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 the older, experienced hands are governing the
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 rather than youngsters. With
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 innovative technologies the
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 supporting machines were invented and the
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 expectancy rate is increasing in those countries more compared to other undeveloped or developing countries.
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 we can discuss about Japan. Japan is the
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 position in the world economy status and having the advanced technologies in all sectors. But in their
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 the old aged people are more comparable to youngsters. Due to the busy work load the youngsters are not interested engage in a family
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. They are interested enjoy their
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 and live as single. So birth rate is coming down and old aged people are increasing more. In order to overcome
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 they are encouraging immigration plans. The same type issue is
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 facing in the
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 Canada. They are doing the same immigration policies to cover their vacancies in the government sector and in private. As per the above discussion in my point of view we need both older and younger ones in a balanced ratio.
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