A great number of people strongly claim that children of families who reach the age of 18should be required to leave the family and live independently. To what extend do you agree or disagree. Support your position with examples

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Nowadays, a majority of people in favour that teenagers should leave their homes and must break their

dependancy

the state of relying on or being controlled by someone or something else

dependency

dependence

of their parents. I partially agree with

this

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statement as it will help them to live alone, responsible

Accept space

to understand the complex world and can

also

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indulge in bad company.

Firstly

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, when the adolescents stay in

rents

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rent

houses they come to know the value of money because they have to pay the fees for accommodation, water, electricity bills and many more.

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, they do not waste the money as well as can save for their future. Apart from that, they are able to understand the complexity of

situation

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the situation

situations

due to

this

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they

might be solve

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might solve

some problems without any help

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from

others.

Thus

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, it is

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first step

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the first step

to being mature in their life.

However

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, offspring are in learning process in that age they

donot

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do not

know what is right or wrong for them owing to

this

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they can trap in bad habits like drugs, smoking, alcohols.

As a result

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, they can ruin their time and distract from their goal.

For instance

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, a research proved by

cambridge

a university in England

Cambridge

university showed that 55% children are addicted to intoxication who are far away from their parents.

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, they are deprived from moral values and begin to behave rude with their family. As a consequence, they can neglect their kins. To sum up, I believe that parents should give freedom to express their

feelings but

Accept comma addition

feelings, but

they should

also

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watch out for on their activities

Accept space

how and with whom they live.

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

252 words

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A great number of people strongly claim that children of families who reach the age of 18should be required to leave the family and live independently. To what extend do you agree or disagree. Support your position with examples

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some say that people should continue to work in the same job for a lifetime, while others say they should change the job at least once in their career. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Plant and animal diversity is declining around the world. Why is this happening? Why is this a problem?

Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after shcool. Discuss both views

Governments give lots of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.