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IELTS 13 - Exam 2 - Writing Task 2 Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some persons believe that today we have too many options. I almost totally agree with
this
 statement. In my opinion, we are living in a world with a great development in science and in society; that`s why we have many choices and chances to develop our potential in life.
For example
, Nowadays you can find multiple options for finding a job. There are many websites specialized in finding jobs or hiring
proffesionals
engaged in a profession or engaging in as a profession or means of livelihood
professionals
such
 as “freelancer.
com
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Com
” or “
upwork
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up work
.
com
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Come
Com
”.
Furthermore
, the internet has may companies
such
 as Facebook, Google, Amazon or
Youtube
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YouTube
 that can open jobs opportunities
almost for everyone
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for almost everyone
. People can look for manual jobs opportunities or local companies, but
also
 with the development of the communications an individual can work for someone in a different country.
Likewise
, social conquests have given more chances for people.
For instance
, we have more free time than in the past, and in that moment we can share time with our families or think about future ideas or personal projects.
Otherwise
, there are certain limits with all these opportunities. It is clear that not everybody
have
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has
 the chance to access to the internet for search
works
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work
 opportunities; and even with today’s social rights it’s not enough for accomplishing personal aspirations and dreams. In conclusion, I believe that we have many chances and more opportunities than years before; but we can`t be too satisfied, there is a long road to find the complete justice and happiness that society needs for people have more chances and opportunities.
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