Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people hold the view that, with regardless of cultural backgrounds of people,
music
is a way by which they are brought together. It is a fact that, thanks to
music
, the people with different cultures have connected together together.Back in 1
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1980s, William
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oncerts concerts
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concerts, concerts
for example
, that took place to raise funds for famine relief, a high number of people across c
ulture
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cultural
and national boundaries participated in different international concerts of him to solve a problem of poverty b
y
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with
music
. His beautiful singing voice and a strong rhythm attracted incredibly broad audiences.
However
, the
music
has united people with different ages.
Music
transcends cultures, brings people together from different generations.
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, a TV s
hows
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show
By Ellen which was reported o
f
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about
4 families. These families of 4 different countries made a relationship since they participated in their c
hild's
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children's
concert around the world. These families create a
music
group of
music
of which the family members i
ncludes
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include
children and parents and g
rand parents
a parent of your father or mother
grandparents
were p
layed
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playing
the musical instrument and shared their ability with their children. To conclude,
i
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,
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think the
music
is a form of entertainment which it could attract broad audiences with different culture and age and effect a magic effect on us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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