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Some people think that books are losing importance as a source of information and entertainment. To what extent do you agree?

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 the books are the source of a wide variety of information, in
this
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 technological era, it is losing the importance. I agree to the point that people are choosing different other medium over books for entertainment and knowledge.
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 with, the modern generation is running in a high paced technology world. Advanced and latest inventions are replacing different methods, which are making the life much easier and comfortable. The arrival of
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internet
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the internet
 is one of the main reasons; the data have been just one touch away on the
internet
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 whereas books are more expensive and time consuming. It is difficult to find a piece of information different books available in the stores.
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Internet
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The internet
 gives the precise and accurate data in a short amount of time, but it takes a while to get any details from a
book
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.
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 to that, in old days people found reading
book
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 as an activity to relax or take their stress away, but the TV,
internet
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 and other physical activities help the people not only entertained but
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 keep them healthy. Reading a
book
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 does not require any physical activity whereas yoga and other meditation techniques helps one to take their stress away as well as makes them healthy. Television has far more programs to entertain people than books so as the
internet
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. YouTube has different videos of different forms, which is enjoyable for all age groups. In conclusion, I can say that, as the people have easier and quicker availability of information and entertainment from other mediums than
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book
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books
the book
, they choose those methods for enlighten the wisdom and for leisure.
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