Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but others think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on TV and the internet. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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of all, I agree with the former idea. I think to see another part of the world and to see it just by the media is totally different.
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, if someone sees sceneries of foreign countries by TV,
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she or he is bound to see limited scenes and angle made by camera manager. Plus, they can't take new experiences like staying in foreign hotels, meeting new friends, etc. Those who insist that travel is unnecessary might think that it would be just a waste of time or money to travel abroad. They might like to modify views and don't want to be bothered by doing unfamiliar things. I can understand some people would think it in a way because these days, media like TV, the YouTube is developed extremely well. And if they just watch videos, they would spend less capital. Still, even though it needs more cash and time, in my opinion, I think there are more advantages to travel the world. I could see various views, meet different friends, try exotic food. These things contain more than just cash.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immersive
  • interactions
  • virtual means
  • cultural nuances
  • language acquisition
  • problem-solving
  • adaptability
  • sustainability
  • virtual tours
  • documentaries
  • sophisticated
  • realistic representations
  • comprehensive understanding
  • financial status
  • carbon footprint
  • digital resources
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