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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the sahara desert or the Antartic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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Globalization it a trendy term in our modern society, making it the word seems smaller, reason why some places that were rarely
visit
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visited
 by tourists are getting more popular day by day,
however
 visiting those places represents a difficult task as some are even
on
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in
 a
though
not given to gentleness or sentimentality
tough
 conditions to get to. Personally, I believe that can result a better
experecience
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experience
travel
 to a well known
places
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place
, where some others
travelers
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 even friends were before, and you have the possibility to find out information regarding to the destination to visit,
also
 would be better according to your preferences find planes and things to do, rather
travel
 to destinations where in advance you know there will not have any facilities,
such
us
to the same degree (often followed by 'as')
as
 hotels, stores, even activities
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
also
 it is relevant to make a call about all of those who
travel
 with kids or elderly people. In
fact just
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fact, just
 thinking about the idea to go to
a
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an
 unknown place makes me feel an uncomfortable sensation. Taking undoubtedly all the mentioned points as disadvantages of visiting to at Unvisited destinations.
On the other hand
, someone who held the opposite view would
provided
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provide
 advantages about travelling to a
places
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place
 where the conditions are difficult, based on arguments
such
 as they will not find busy and crowed areas,
also
 in generally speaking the trip can be more affordable than
travel
 to a conventional place. From arguments and examples given I firmly belief that overall people tend to like more those famous places where everyone goes, in order to make the most of their
holidays
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holiday
 time
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 when
travel
 with family.
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