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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. others ,however,believe that school is the palce to learn this. discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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According to some people kids can be best guided by parents to be productive members of
society
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 others are of the opinion that educational institutes are better place to acquire
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 skill. In my opinion, home is the best place for upbringing of children and improving their moral values. Some people argue and I agree that
initially
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 brought by children at home plays a vital
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 in making them good human beings who could be beneficial for the
society
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. As is famous that mother`s lap is
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first school
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the first school
 of
child
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 and the lessons learnt here can never be forgotten.
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, the moral values taught by the mother stays with kids forever. Another point to consider is that parents read and understand the psyche of their children far better than the teachers.
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, they can communicate far better with their kids and teach them the life subjects which prompts children to contribute effectively towards betterment of the neighbourhood.
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, some people have the notion that schools which teaches the pupils the practical aspects of life can play a better
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 in enhancing the capabilities of
child
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 as positive members of
society
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. They believe that in educational institutions' students' social interaction with their class fellows can be a useful teaching tool. The teachers can be excellent guides in
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 aspect,
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, while settling conflicts between two students in the classroom. The teachers verdict in
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 case will be of vital importance, reward for humane kids and punishment for
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.
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, children can receive practical demonstrations at school via stage dramas or
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 playing.
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 can play an enormous
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 in positively upbringing of
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child
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children
the child
a child
. In conclusion, the brought up of children at home plays an important
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 in making or breaking of
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child
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children
the child
a child
 in the form of positive contributors of
society
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 or the other way round.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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