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University students are increasingly studying abroad as a part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

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The table provides information on enrolments of students at Manchester University in three decades (1937, 1967 and 2017).
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, the given information describes the percentage of female/ male and overseas/local students. Overall, while the number of students increases as well as the percentage of female and overseas students, the proportion of
male
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males
 and local ones decreases. The most significant changes concern the growth of enrolled students. It raised from 327 to 1133 over a 30-year period.
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, from 1967 to 2017 the number went up from 1133 to 6254. Another growth regards the percentage of students from overseas. The proportion climbed from 7% to 32% over 50 years. Interestingly, the ratio of females in the university did not rise
steadily but
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steadily, but
 dropped between 1937 and 1967. We can see a different pattern in the male ratio. It grows from 1937 to 1967 but
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 declines to 45% in 2017. Concerning the rate of the students who came from within 40 miles of Manchester, the rate dropped from 55% to 1-2% over 80 years.
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