Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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each
children
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child
should know
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how to behave in an acceptable manner in a society.
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, it is believed by some,
onus
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the onus
is on the parent's shoulders to teach
how be a
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how to be a
responsible citizen while others hold an opinion that
school contribution
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the school contribution
should be there. Personally speaking
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combined effort
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the combined effort
a combined effort
of
both
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parents and teachers can help to teach our generation how to be
good citizen
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good citizens
a good citizen
. On the one hand, it is considered by some parents are the front line
care taker
a custodian who is hired to take care of something (property or a person)
caretaker
and they are responsible for instilling moral values.
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, they have
huge impact
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a huge impact
on intellectual behaviour and character traits.
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parents play a huge
role
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from bed time
storirs
a message that tells the particulars of an act or occurrence or course of events; presented in writing or drama or cinema or as a radio or television program
stories
to converting them into
responsible citizen
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responsible citizens
.It is well known fact that those who have good relations with their families are less
likely to involve in
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likely to involve
crimal
someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime
criminal
activities
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,
such
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as
crome
another word for chromium when it is used in dyes or pigments
chrome
crime
cream
, drug abuse and robbery. So,
parents
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parents'
role
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cannot be neglected at any cost.
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some people believe that children spend the majority of their time in school in learning and teachers are their
role
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model since they listen to them carefully what they say.
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, while studying in school children
encouter
come together
encounter
other students having different nature and educator can help them how to behave and be tolerant to others. School helps in development of attitude and
personallity
the complex of all the attributes--behavioral, temperamental, emotional and mental--that characterize a unique individual
personality
and teachers should teach them how to handle various
personality
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personalities
with grace and modesty.
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, Teachers are imperative in
devoleping
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
developing
children
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children's
child's
character. In my opinion, Human development is a complex interplay of many
factore
anything that contributes causally to a result
factors
such
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as parents and teachers and
both
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are inextricably linked to each others.To elaborate
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parents and teachers are indispensable part developing child's personality because
both
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are
suppliment
add as a supplement to what seems insufficient
supplements
supplemental
supplemented
to each other.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
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combined effort
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the combined effort
a combined effort
of
both
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can transform a child into
responsible member
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responsible members
a responsible member
of
nation
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the nation
a nation
.
in
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In
conclusion, despite people have different views.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe learning from parents and
teacher plays
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teacher, plays
significant
role
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in
children
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child
child's
children's
development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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