Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a negative or positivedevelopmen?

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It has been said that Technology makes the world as a small village.

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the given opinion on the statement that countries are not bound with frontiers in the field of online shopping because one nation consumes other nation's products in any corner of the globe

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countries are becoming similar.There are obviously justifiable arguments, but in my opinion, I agree with the statement because the upside of positive development of online shopping supersedes the downside. In defence of my position, the obvious argument that

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can put forward is that people can wear chosen outfits into

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platform.To elaborate someone selects a product in the internet which is manufactured by another nation.In consequence his/her travel cost, time,

labor

a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages

labour

all those expenses remain intake.At the mean time

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others races

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experience that clothes.

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it would be tough to separate man by outfits while spread throughout. Export-import are very comfortable in todays world as Technological advances make that easy.

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development makes a way to earn foreign currency.

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-Daraz/Amazon is doing businesses in internet and they are paying

tax

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taxes

that

increase

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increases

the amount of official revenue. Cultural discrimination will be affected by exchanging outfits.To explain

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nowadays people are used to buying tribe's clothes.

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one can observe other's culture outfits though there is million miles

distance

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distant

. In conclusion, Shopping is

expresses position, direction or location, or point in time

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things that make the products near at hand, simultaneously, it makes the life very cosy exactly.

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, it has been improving many others sectors that

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implemented before.So

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it's a positive development, we should say loudly.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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