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Having a good university degree guarantees people a good job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Life has many important aspects, and one of the most important is attaining a good job. There is widespread belief that the excellent university academic
degree
 ensures graduates an excellent employment.
However
, I disagree with
this
 statement because I think that
degree
 is necessary, but there are other factors that involve in order to secure a mainstream job. In
this
 essay, I will shed some light on why
degree
 is required and other skills too
To begin
 with
this
, the good university
degree
 broadens the horizons of learners and train by providing them required knowledge and train people in a certain way, that they will able to face challenges in the field. People go trough though academics theories and exams which makes them perfect in the subject with technical knowledge. When people graduate with top grades in a
degree
, it enhances the chances of getting a job because it ensures that grades are able to face challenges in compete workplaces. To illustrate more, a recent study showed by Toronto University states that many multinational companies prefer university graduates because they
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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